Angel (poem i wrote)

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Angel (poem i wrote)

Postby zelda » Fri Feb 17, 2006 8:58 pm

ok so here's a poem a wrote!
tell me what you think!


Angel you're always beside me

When I cry you whipe away my tears

when i'm cold you wrape yourself around me.

you find the pieces to my broken heart.

you protect me from Satin

you catch me when i fall

you watch over me when i sleep

you hold my hand when i'm scared

Angel take me away from this place

I know your beautiful but let me see your face.
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Postby creed4 » Sat Feb 18, 2006 8:16 am

It okay, There are a coulpe of point where the pome is hard to follow.
Tis No Fool to lose what he can not keep to gain what he can never lose.
What does it profit a man to gain the World yet lose his soul.
Choose Life that you Might live.
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Postby Anna Mae » Tue Feb 21, 2006 6:16 pm

Are you referring to a guardian angel type of figure or to JC/God/HolySpirit?

More punctuation in general would be good.


Angel you're always beside me

When I cry you wipe away my tears

when i'm cold you wrap yourself around me.

you find the pieces to my broken heart.

you protect me from Satan

you catch me when i fall

you watch over me when i sleep

you hold my hand when i'm scared

Angel take me away from this place What place? Be more specific.

I know you're beautiful but let me see your face.
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[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:

“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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