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Postby LostChild » Mon Jan 09, 2006 3:11 pm

Okay, here's one that JadeFox inspired me to write from her LOTR Poetry section. It's in Italian Sonnet form with 10 syllables per line, with an 'abba abba cdcd ee' rhyme form. Not as simple as it sounds...

The RING

Simple band of gold etched with fire
The death of all who wish to wield it
Changing sizes the way it wants to fit
Greatest Enemy's only desire.
From this band, many grow old and tire
To care for this thing which they have commit
Their lives. All have thoughts and dreams to transmit
It to fresh owner. Only the Shire
Hobbits can do this for all else fail.
What shall come of these loving little folk?
To but be strong for this task and not frail.
Sadly, none else can take this heavy yoke.
With dread in his heart, Frodo leaves his friends.
Once this thing is destroyed all things shall mend.
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Postby Ssjjvash » Mon Jan 09, 2006 3:17 pm

That's pretty clever.
I'll have to try my hand at this Italian Sonnet some time.
If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!

Rudyard Kipling


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"You are not who your mistakes say you are; you are not the sum of your failures!"---Rev. Billy Miller

Proverbs 18:24
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Postby creed4 » Mon Jan 09, 2006 3:19 pm

Cool LOTR cute. Good wook keep it up
Tis No Fool to lose what he can not keep to gain what he can never lose.
What does it profit a man to gain the World yet lose his soul.
Choose Life that you Might live.
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Postby LostChild » Mon Jan 09, 2006 4:49 pm

Thanx. \^o^/
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Postby Wind » Tue Jan 10, 2006 7:52 pm

That is way awesome keep it up!
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rocklobster 01:17 - "What's the point of being an adult if you can't be childish sometimes?"

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Postby LostChild » Tue Jan 10, 2006 10:11 pm

Now, just so you know, this isn't only for LOTR poetry, but all my poetry. Here's another one...

Time of No Fears

Darkness sucks me into its arms tonight
Warm blankets wrap around me, quick tears stream
Down my face. Hearing yells I try to scream
Guardians locked in a desperate fight.
With nowhere to run, no one to hold tight,
I want to find a comfort space, a dream.
Surprisingly, neither at me will ream.
Bags are calling me, ready to take flight.
His truck drives off, making all fall silent.
She closes the front door, showing it locked.
Morning shall show if anything was bent
I won’t run from fears; I will stay docked.
One day, none of this will I need to hear
One day, at home, I will live without fear.
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Postby LostChild » Thu Jan 12, 2006 7:50 pm

Okay, so its morbid. That day stunk... This next one is a Mock Epic Poem. Sure its long, but 'try' to bear with me. If its really not comprehendable, let me know, and I'll post something else. This was also homework, so it had to have little definition words 'n stuff in there; and that's also the reason why its so long.

(I don't have a title for this one...)

Caves vast caught a father’s wandering eye,
Starts the sad tale none may twist or lie.
An eel’s den, long out of love or use
Found by the father, he could not refuse.
In moved wife and children all very dear
Father there to protect them without fear.
One fine morning, the water clear and blue
A seahorse and wife played with children new.
Through the weeds, father had a happy jest.
Mother said looking on from her green nest:
“Oh gracious husband, Drake ♣, my ocean Zeus ♥,
Love from this family, who could refuse?
So loving a husband always in good mood
So caring the children of our big brood.
Abraham couldn’t ask for better sons
Or daughters, here under our watered-sun.â€
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Postby Wind » Fri Jan 13, 2006 1:33 am

I was thinking you could call it " Of dragons and things..." I thought that was a catchy title for an awesome poem
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Wind 01:55 - O.O

Wind 01:55 - noooooooo

chatbot 01:55 - Wind asks, Am I shatterproof?
My answer: No

DiamondDragon 01:57 - YAYS, I'M SHATTERPROOF!!!!!!!!

Sparx00 02:55 - Mean loaf is the loaf of the gods

Strafe 01:09 - I'm a hotcake
Strafe 01:10 - I am a very hot cake


rocklobster 01:17 - "What's the point of being an adult if you can't be childish sometimes?"

Strafe 02:38 - ~EWWW BOYS ARE NASTYYYY!~
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Postby LostChild » Fri Jan 13, 2006 6:46 am

Okay. I'll go ahead and give that a try.
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Postby LostChild » Mon Jan 23, 2006 9:14 pm

(This one doesn't have a name either)

I guess I’m just a disappointment to the world.
No matter what I do, it’s never good enough
to satisfy those around me.
I try and I try, but it is no use.
Mentors look down upon me,
And friends think I’m irrational.
LORD, please take me away
To be up THERE with YOU.
That’s all I want
Now, all I need.
Die here,
Live THERE.
I’ve
Tried.
To find
YOUR peace
Is not easy
Though it may seem.
If people do love me,
Then why is it so hard?
I can’t see past the shameful looks,
Or get over their hurtful words.
Why can’t this yoke be lighter for me, LORD?
Why can’t I please my mentors and my friends?
Please send me YOUR peace and forgiving heart, dear GOD.
Hurry – build me up to fight this, or take me HOME.

HINT: If the format doesn't make sense, count the syllables in each line. XD
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Postby LostChild » Fri Feb 10, 2006 2:33 pm

Outlaw

I ride along a dusty road,
And I don’t know what to do.
Some people praise me,
While others curse my name.

All the fame in the world is at my grasp,
And yet it’s not what I desire.
The money I have is not rightly mine,
And yet I throw it all away.

I have but one love,
And many have love for me.
I stay true to my one love,
Yet so many try to tempt me.

The friends I have are just like me,
And the steeds I ride are not meant to carry me.
And yet I take them far from their homes,
Only to see them sold to many a greedy eye.

The country in which I live,
Is being torn apart by steel ladders laid on the ground.
The men that build it, steal peoples’ homes,
And kill the ones in the way.

I ride to prevent the killings,
And not to see people homeless.
One, two, three, they’re all hanged,
And I have managed to save but one.

My name is James,
Jessie James.
The outlaw of the west,
And I ride along a long, dusty, dark rode.

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Okay, here's one of the first poems I wrote that got me hooked on writing 'em. {The first one I can ever remember writing was for the 9/11 attack, but I'll post that one later.} A quick bio on Outlaw: I was studying Jessie James in my English/ History class, and randomly wrote this poem.
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Postby creed4 » Sat Feb 11, 2006 10:24 am

It good
Tis No Fool to lose what he can not keep to gain what he can never lose.
What does it profit a man to gain the World yet lose his soul.
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