Hitokiri's Manga Projects (White Day, Unnamed)

[Hitokiri]

Well, couple new things.

I decided to combine my two threads (White Day and my new series, She Loves Me, He Loves Me) after talking to Ashley because I want to just have one center thread for this.

As well, I got a new site running. http://www.csmanga.com Not much on it save for 21 pages of White Day. I will be putting up my new series after I finish up with Chapter 2.

If you want to see the new series, please go to http://crystalshores.bravehost.com

[Mave]

LOL Hey, I've read through it all and thought it's quite funny despite some cliches (but it's supposed to be based off Love Hina anyway so I think that's fine ^^)

I won't comment too much on the art since I think it's something you'll improvise as you keep practising.

1) Some readers may not like "Holy crap" but it's something you can decide later on.
2) Could you make it easier to read the pages? Instead of me having to go 'back' , to and fro on each page, you could provide links to directly move on the next page. That would make your pages more reader-friendly.

Cool! It's all starting to materialize. Good job, Hitokiri!

[Hitokiri]

I am working on some gallery programs right now.

[Kisa]

yay! *cheers* been looking forward to this! ^^

[Hitokiri]

Chapter 1 is not yet completed and due to some tehcnical problems, it might not be ready for a while. ::searches for his Paint Shop Pro c.d.)

[Hitokiri]

I didnt feel like making a new topic but I decided to do a big overhaul on the general appearance of editing the manga. Pages 19, 20, and 21 showcase the new layout I have came up with. What is update is:

- Outlined the less darker lines
- Added more texture and backgrounds
- A much better shading process then what I used before IMO.

So please comment.

[Mave]

This ought to be moved to the Webmanga section. ^^

Anyway, I think you're improving based on the latest pages, 19 and 20. Your lines are becoming more smooth and you're starting to use screentones.

[Hitokiri]

This ought to be moved to the Webmanga section. ^^

Anyway, I think you're improving based on the latest pages, 19 and 20. Your lines are becoming more smooth and you're starting to use screentones.

To an extent, I'm using screentones. Thanks.

Oh and please move this to the webmanga section if you so desire.

[inkhana]

Moved

[Hitokiri]

Thanks ^_^

[Syreth]

I really enjoyed all of the lighthearted silly humor! I think that stuff is really entertaining. I'll be looking forward to see how your story progresses.

Something I was wondering... the main character, Akira, calls his sister "Onii-chan," right? I was under the impression that this was Japanese for "brother," and that "Onee-chan," would be Japanese for "sister." Please, someone clear this up for me, 'cause I stand confused.

[Dunedan]

Yeah, I think you're right...

[Hitokiri]

As some know, I am working on a series called White Day and is currently...well...let's just say I have been slacking on it. I REAALLY need to get back on it and I REEAALLLY want to but I...well..I procrastinate to easily.

Anyways, I have decided while I am not working on WD, I have decided to work on another title, much smaller then WD. Most likey 3-4 chapters or so.

I have not named it yet but I have thought of several that could work. Basically and I am just working out the bugs, it is about a boy and a girl who are in a play together who both play the lead roles. Not sure how the roles will work out but in this play, they are to fall in love. In thier lives, however, they begin to fall in love as well and thier lives begin to mirror thier acting lives.

They are however hesitant or even loathing to establish a relationship for either undecided reasons that I havn't come up yet or I may leave them never mentioned to leave the reader to guess.

A vast majority of it as well would be considered narative, as if either the boy or the girl is thinking this. So not alot of dialouge. By them thinking, I can think you can clearly illustrate thier feelings for one another more so then dialouge. We are listening to thier inner-most thoughts.

I really wanted to do a romance in which WD can be considered but minus the comedy. I am a big fan of Eva as most know and you will see a theme of Eva which is prevelent in the series where the characters questions themselves...the psycho-analysistic view on the series. This will play a role and possibly be the explanation for the entire story.

I just felt I needed to type this out to get the idea down since I've had it for a week and never wrote it down until now. That and I also wanted suggestions.

http://crystalshores.bravehost.com/love.htm

[Hitokiri]

Ahhh crap

You're right. Either a typo or mistake.

[Hitokiri]

Here's some possible names I am toying with:

"Voices Between Male and Female"
"Her Love with His"
"Till the Curtain Closes..."
"Thier Play"

I love the title for the series "His and Her Circumstances" and I am trying to mold it from that title since it portrays su much for the series...however I want to distinguish any preconceptions of my series by the similarity of each titles.

[Hitokiri]

I have a goo dportion of the dialouge finished as well as the character designs and names.

The series will contain only two characters, the lead male and female.

The males name will be Makoto Kamon and the girls name is Maemi Misomeru.

[Gypsy]

Ah, I love the name Maemi. I'm looking forward to seeing some concept art.

[Hitokiri]

Not sure if I will release any concept art. I guess I am mean Most likely I will when the first 2 chapters are done.

[Mave]

Whatever you decide to do (concept art vs chapters), I hope to see you post either soon. Don't leave us hanging like this heh. ^_^

[Hitokiri]

Heh heh I guess I might release somethin ^_^

Not much I warrant but nevertheless...

A concept rough rough rough draft of the first splash page...

Maemi on a bicycle.

[Hitokiri]

Here's the almost final draft of the first splash page. I am just going to clean some stuff on th eorginal copy and then work on it on the omputer.

[Hitokiri]

Two chapters are done and should be up by sometime next week.

[bigsleepj]

Cool! We'll be looking forward to it.

[Hitokiri]

I hated how the painted picture turned out so I opted for a computer painted image. Here is the current 1st chapter cover.

[bigsleepj]

That's an excellent drawing! Thanks for posting it!

[Hitokiri]

I decided to put up a preview of the first page. I have also decided to name it She Loves Me, He Loves Me

[Mave]

The use of screentones is looking good. ^^ Are you going to post this in your White Day link?

[Hitokiri]

Are you going to post this in your White Day link?

White Day link? Do you mean the website, Mave?

[Hitokiri]

Tired of waiting for me to upload them?

I decided that once I finished every 4 pages, I am going to upload them. Go to She Loves Me, He Loves Me Section to reas the first 4 pages and splash as well as an FX index.

[Hitokiri]

Next 3 pages are up.