Shadow Crisis: The Series (Violence)

Postby **Shia Kyosuka** » Fri Jun 10, 2005 11:45 am

There may be 24.

But, I've been planning on keeping this going by introducing *ahem* seasons.

So they'll spend 18-24 episodes on this mission, I'll take a break, and then I'll start the next season(s).

EDIT: Whoops, double posted...

Postby **Shia Kyosuka** » Tue Jun 21, 2005 10:33 pm

*sigh* I'm very sorry about the lack of Shad Cry episodes... I've just been so uninspired lately...

EDIT: I wish I had access to an MSG game... Those games are a great inspiration.

Does anybody have a suggestion to inspire my intellegent, action anime?

Like games, books, things like that?

Postby **Photosoph** » Fri Jun 24, 2005 2:21 pm

No problem. I'm not sure what would be inspiring... maybe reading other people's stories? I'm thinking that Myoti's story somewhere in the writing section could be. While it's different, it also has 'furries' and so might inspire you for characters or something. *Shrugs* If you want to check it out you'll find it here: http://www.christiananime.net/showthread.php?t=20204&page=1

Postby **Shia Kyosuka** » Fri Jun 24, 2005 4:21 pm

lol I clicked it again.

I'm going to start on the rest of the episode now.

Postby **Shia Kyosuka** » Wed Jul 06, 2005 11:24 am

Postby **Photosoph** » Wed Jul 06, 2005 2:34 pm

That's cool though; thanks for writing more. ^_^ Ack, by without inspiration do you mean you had to force yourself to write? I have to do that sometimes; it's annoying but sometimes needed in order to get past a block at certain parts of the story.

Postby **Shia Kyosuka** » Wed Jul 06, 2005 6:27 pm

Yeah, I had to force myself to write, but it's good to be writing again. As a plus, I just rented MGS3, so I'll be writing much more from now on.

Postby **Photosoph** » Wed Jul 06, 2005 7:20 pm

That's cool. :grin:

Go Metal Gear Solid 3! -I haven't played it before, but I'm pretty sure I know the gist of it. ^_^

Postby **Shia Kyosuka** » Sun Jul 10, 2005 7:41 am

I was just about to start a new episode when I noticed your new, cool, funky-fresh hip-hop avatar!

I like it!... okay, now for the story.

Postby **Photosoph** » Mon Jul 11, 2005 2:59 pm

Aw, thanks! ^_^ I hadn't changed it for a while, and thought it was about time. :grin:

Postby **Shia Kyosuka** » Thu Jul 21, 2005 10:03 pm

Postby **Photosoph** » Thu Jul 21, 2005 11:11 pm

Ah, I was going to suggest an edit before I caught the 'Not Proofread' note at the end there. ^_^
Good, though I would suggest starting a new line for each speaker; it just helps to distinguish between them to make it a little easier to read. Other than that... I think that's fine. There were some other things I was going to mention -but I'm sure you'll find and fix them up when you proofread it. ^_^

Thanks for writing more, Shia!

Postby **Shia Kyosuka** » Thu Jul 21, 2005 11:46 pm

Thanks for the suggestion. I'll probably start writing like that next segment.

I forgot to write an episode title. lol I'll get right on that.

Postby **Shia Kyosuka** » Mon Jul 25, 2005 5:09 pm

Postby **Photosoph** » Mon Jul 25, 2005 8:42 pm

Ah yes, writer's block. -__- I have that with one of my stories at the moment, I think... for me I think I'll just have to push past it and get to a scene that I really like.

Just a note; snuck and sneak in the same sentence can interrupt the flow a little bit. If you replaced the snuck with crept, it would just smooth the whole sentence. I'm not sure why; it just does. *Shrugs.* Somehow having two words that come from the same verb close together just doesn't flow all that well.

There were a few errors like spelling and a change of tense, but seriously, I think this, writing-wise, is one of your better ones so far. While the other chapters had more action, this one was structured etc better. Great writing!

Postby **Shia Kyosuka** » Mon Jul 25, 2005 8:58 pm

that button is annoying.

Anyway, Thanks for the comment. It seems like listening to Metal Gear music did the trick. When I proofread it, I'll make sure I find those mistakes you mentioned and correct them...

Postby **Shia Kyosuka** » Tue Jul 26, 2005 10:12 am

edited

Postby **Photosoph** » Wed Jul 27, 2005 4:33 pm

Very cool; and the ninja's statement is very intriguing... it makes me wonder just what side he's on, and whether his motives will cause him to be traitorous or not... ^_^ Great!

Postby **Shia Kyosuka** » Thu Jul 28, 2005 11:19 am

I've decided that... I should stop writing this over the internet and wait to give out a copy of the video game whenever it's done (not free of course). If I say I have big plans for this guy... Why is his story over the internet?

Not like I have any readers anyway.

I'm going to delete all traces of Shadow Crisis from this thread and save it to my computer later today.

Postby **Photosoph** » Thu Jul 28, 2005 10:15 pm

*Sigh.* All right; I will miss your story, but I know what it's like: I don't post my better stuff over the internet either -too risky.
Anyway, hope your story writing goes well from here on; if you have anyone in real life (Aka not on the internet) who you can share it with and get constructive criticism (you really do need the right sort of person; there are those who can kill creativity with a single word), I'd suggest sharing your story with that person; sometimes it can help to encourage you if you ever feel down about your story. I don't know if you ever have days where you feel like everything you do is sub-par, but I do; that's why I'm suggesting this. You might be fine writing without anyone reading your story -but just in case you're like me, I'd suggest finding someone who can help and encourage you as you write.

If not, then no worries. ^__^ I'm sure you'll know better than I do what'll suit you better.

All the best!

-Psoph.

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