Crying out *poem*

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Crying out *poem*

Postby girlninja » Fri Jul 15, 2005 4:17 am

I wait in the afternoon's dusk
feeling the emptiness inside
staring at the heavens of magesty
can't even begin to cry

Knowing that a friend is near
already laid down his life
and here i sit in emptiness still
unwilling to take that step and dive

Here i am
Crying out to God
wishing i could be
held in his everlasting arms
covered with his astral wings

And yet i sit
unable to move
from this place of disease
Kill me God, take my sins
make me whole again
make me whole again
make me free
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous

and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
:dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance:

WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

:jump: :lol: :thumb:

"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

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Postby c.t.,girl » Fri Jul 15, 2005 4:23 am

hm...that's deep...i like it...good job! A+! ^__^
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Postby firestorm » Fri Jul 15, 2005 5:29 am

wow that moved me alot! Do you mind if I print this?
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Postby girlninja » Fri Jul 15, 2005 8:27 pm

*smile not at all just please put my name as the author ^_^
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous

and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
:dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance:

WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

:jump: :lol: :thumb:

"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.

*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^

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Postby Magekind » Sun Jul 17, 2005 3:16 pm

I wait in the afternoon's dusk
feeling the emptiness inside
staring at the heavens of magesty
can't even begin to cry

With a 'j', my friend, a 'j'. Majesty. Otherwise, it sounds like a parody on my name...

Rather enjoyable overall. Good depth, and that evil taunting half-rhythm. I'm beginning to like it.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.

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Postby Shadowchild » Sun Jul 17, 2005 9:19 pm

wow, just wow i wish i could write like that but sadly all of my stuff is junk. -_-
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