Okami manga- new manga i'm trying ^^

[girlninja]

well this is my first attempt at a manga >< i'm not good but i'm trying lol this is based off my story in the writing thread titled "a story or novel not sure which heh" but i'm tryin to draw >< please let me know what you think

this is the rough draft of the title page and a few of the pages...their sketchy but i wanted to see what ppl thought ^^;;

[Puguni]

You said it was sketchy, so I hope that you will make sure to make the characters stand out. ^^ You shouldn't put so much margin inbetween the panels and...that's it! XD

[girlninja]

^^ ok i was wondering when their talking do i Bubble around the words or how should i do it? should i ink it, color it? *i don't own a tablet or anything but i have colored pencils ^^ hehe* suggestions please ^^

[Puguni]

I think that's based on what you want. Most mangakas don't use bubbles when they're introducing something, and even then, sometimes they put boxes around them. :O I'd say leave the bubbles to the speaking. You don't have to color the bubbles...if that was what you were aiming at. But inking is good.

[Photosoph]

Those look really cool! I especially like the design on the first page, and the way you've drawn the main character. Nice design! One thing I did notice is that on the second page his arm might be a little small... but I'm not sure if that's part of your drawing style or anything. Other than that, I think they look good so far -although they are a little hard to read because they're in light pencil.

[oro!]

I like the chibi-ish design of hitori. Like photosoph said it is a little light to see clearly, maybe try pen for later ones? These are just scetches anyway...