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the carnival

Postby Mithrandir » Fri Oct 31, 2003 9:24 pm

OK. I've been asked to post a song here. It doesn't have any beat if you've never heard it, but if you have, it's not to bad. I'm interested what everyone thinks this song is about. (note: wolf, silence: you aren't eligable.)


in a wonderfull, mystical carnival
feel the magical, wimsical powerful
introspection's impossible, can't you see?
for if you despise all the lies what would be?

see the beautiful, dutiful clientel
twirling round and round cross the ground - round the well
numbness clouds the mind - all is fine in this place
but what's past the lights? all the sights? is there grace?

through the music i can see a dim shape I am
wondering where have I seen it before?
then through the mist I see a face I know I've
only seen when on my knees alone

even wonderfull, mystical can't conceal
or essaying hide - less divide - truths so real
but the question that still remains in this place
seems so out of reach though some teach love and grace

though at carnival I recall eventually
what so wonderfull, beautifull stands by me
so I turn to face my disgrace - just to find
though I felt it here yet I hear it's not mine!

now I know whom I see. this shape is inside me
yes I know where I have seen it before
and I see through His eyes. how I bought all these lies
yet His scared hand reaches out to me

from this mystical carnival I would flee
if this mystical carnival captured me
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Postby Michael » Fri Oct 31, 2003 9:29 pm

It'd better have a good beat 'cause it puts me to sleep.
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Postby Mithrandir » Fri Oct 31, 2003 9:34 pm

It's in 6/8, but it's pretty slow. Hmm... Maybe I'll have to record it and post that.

BOT: I was wondering what you thought the lyrics meant, not what you thought of the song itself...
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Postby Michael » Fri Oct 31, 2003 9:37 pm

The look on your avatar says it all for me.
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Postby Mithrandir » Fri Oct 31, 2003 9:40 pm

I'm sorry, I don't understand. Can you be more specific as to your meanings...?
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Postby Michael » Fri Oct 31, 2003 9:45 pm

I don't like the lyrics.
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Fri Oct 31, 2003 9:53 pm

I'm really bad at riddles and deciphering poetry; :stressed: but, here it goes. I think the carnival could be your sin nature or possibly who you truly are and all the games we play within our minds. (Yells, "EireWolf, give me a clue!")

I'm wrong, aren't I? :(

Whatever it may mean, I like it a lot. I think you are such a great poet, OldPhil.

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Mithrandir » Fri Oct 31, 2003 9:54 pm

Michael: OK. I'll accept that. It's a foregone conclusion that someone won't like everything written. So anyone else....?
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Fri Oct 31, 2003 9:58 pm

Lost dreams and being caught up in the busy world and material possessions or state of mind as to who you should be, is what my friend sitting here suggested. :) Basically, you just assimilate to the status quo and forget who you really are. :stressed:

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Mithrandir » Fri Oct 31, 2003 10:02 pm

TNC: I can't say whether you are right or not (here), as that would ruin part of the meaning of up the thread. I will post what I thought the song meant later. (I may even post a full rendition of it.
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