Aldean Chronicles - Episode 1Part 1

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Postby starwarsboy90 » Sat Feb 19, 2005 8:22 pm

Hey everyone, here's the first Episode of Aldean Chronicles, you can check the rest of the episodes at the official site.

[url]http://starwarsboy90.tripod.com/
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Postby Magekind » Mon Feb 21, 2005 1:55 pm

DON'T DO IT! NO, NO NO! DO NOT, I repeat, do NOT try to quote God Himself or His immediate servants. Give vague descriptions, dance around the subject, or quote the scripture itself, but do NOT give them YOUR version of their personality.

That aside...

Actually, Earth is currently 1/3 the size of the standard inhabited planet. Don't ask.

If you withdraw Argadorn from position as Angel Gabriel, I recall my lack of interest as stated on my critique of episode 3.

I'm hoping there's some really good reason for the polytheism.

That'll work. Nice execution.

Hm. You're making this Gabriel guy sound really strange...

Yelled? I kinda doubt that...

Statues of angels doing battle? Still a "graven image." Think about it.

Overall, a good story. I like the later installments better, but this piece of background helped.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.

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Postby Warrior 4 Jesus » Mon Feb 21, 2005 3:28 pm

Magekind, I don't think a writer should quote God, but I don't see what's wrong with having his angels talk. This is starwarsboy's fiction. Its not like he's trying to pretend its part of the Bible and you should state plainly what you mean as a writer, not dance around the subject as you suggest. Anyway that's my thoughts.

starwarsboy, good job! I've only read a small part of it (will read the rest later) but it sure shows promise. Did you get influence from the book Paradise Lost?

Now that I have read it completly it isn't right to have evil creating things (they can only corrupt and mutate), demons can't be forgiven and re-enter God's presence in Heaven by doing any deed and humans do not become angels when they die and go to Heaven.
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Postby starwarsboy90 » Mon Feb 21, 2005 6:12 pm

Exactly, however Demons can do miracles and, well using thier sorcery, they can create, mutate, but then again, you should read the glossary on the website, it will really help you will the most interesting questions. Of course they can't ever be forgiven, that's why.. well you'll find out soon enough.
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Postby Warrior 4 Jesus » Mon Feb 21, 2005 10:37 pm

Demons can't do miracles (miracles are holy). They do use sorcery but like I said they can't create. Only God can do that, all they can do is corrupt his works for their purposes. What website are you talking about?
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Postby starwarsboy90 » Tue Feb 22, 2005 5:40 am

Well for starters, look at the Demons and Angels Page on the website, http://starwarsboy90.tripod.com/
you will notice all these looked up scriptures and all this related factual/scriptual things about Angels and Demons, some of this stuff will blow your mind. I could say your wrong, that's why you should really study the bible my Brother in Christ. Oh well, this series focuses on witnessing to Non-Christians, and giving a deeper meaning to christianity, which we ourselves sometimes lack.
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Postby Warrior 4 Jesus » Tue Feb 22, 2005 7:19 pm

Those photos of the angels on your site are very hard to determine what's in the photos. There is no reason for angels to desire to be photographed. Demons on the other hand could use these appirations or whatever to take one's mind away from Christ. But I'm sure angels have been seen by believers and some unbelievers, but like I said there is no reason for them to appear in photos. They are as good as the evidence of ghosts in photos (which is lacking). Although I believe demons can portray themselves as ghosts to people who want to believe that instead of in Christ.
Please don't call me wrong. I have studied the Bible and know of these verses, but I don't have the best memory. Okay the demons can perform miracles but they aren't from God. To be specific not all miracles are from God. Are you happy now?

That said there was man from my church who experience an encounter with what he believed was an angel. He and his family were sleeping at night. He woke up to find a fire had started in his backyard. He got a hose and another nondescripent man came and helped him put out the fire. When the fire was out the man was no where to be seen, he had just vanished and the man from my church had never seen him before in his life. The man wasn't a passerby, or a neighbour. He later determined that God had sent an angel to help him put out the fire, so his family wouldn't be roasted in a potential house fire. God is awesome!
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Postby starwarsboy90 » Tue Feb 22, 2005 8:00 pm

Your right that Demons can portray themselves as Angels. They can do miracles and the works. Ghosts aren't really real, even the Bible talks about them and explains that they are Demons at mischief. I totally Agree with you Brother, God is Awesome. This is why I am writing my series, I am witnessing to Non-Christians, whom love Anime and not to mention, give a deeper understanding of Christianity and all things involved. But then again, that is my mission from God, to witness through writing, and I'm doing an ok job for now, at least. I try to be as factual as I can, sometimes even as scriptual as I can but remember, this series is also Fantasy. Thanks for the imput, your words do have meaning Warrior. Your a Warrior, and I'm a Paladin for Christ, we are brothers in more than the sense of the word,hehe.
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