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The Angel And The Musician - poem

Postby Tatsu » Sat Nov 28, 2009 6:43 pm

So yes... :P I wrote a poem the other day. Not sure how good it is O.o but i'll post it anyway. :P And if there is a specific place I should've posted this, rather than just making a new thread in here, I'm sorry. :P So, yeah

Come and listen
To the tale of the Heavens
Of the lore and the legend;
The angel and the musician

Worlds apart
She looked down
Never knowing
That it would be the start

Fingers flying
The musician softly played
His voice echoed
And inside he was dying

And as his heart rang
Up high to the Heavens
Whispers of life
To him her heart sang

Hoping to only see
He looked up
Searching for her
Neither knew what would come to be

And as their hands brushed
Their eyes gazing
Heaven and Earth one
All life was hushed

Falling
Into a forbidden love
The world, a silence
Their hearts calling

Waiting for the black
They felt no regret
Standing firm
They turned their backs

And as the wave crashed
They stood hand-in-hand
"Forever" was said
The angel and the musician.
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Postby talitha cumi » Sun Nov 29, 2009 7:50 am

..nice poem ... do you really love writing poems???... hmmp..
[SIZE="1"][color="DarkOrange"]somewhere between the hot and the cold
somewhere between the new and the old
somewhere between who I am and who I used to be
somewhere in the middle, You'll find me...

somewhere between the wrong and the right
somewhere between the darkness and the light
somewhere between who I was and who You're making me
[color="Lime"][SIZE="4"]LORD[/SIZE][/color], somewhere in the middle, You'll find me...

[by Casting Crowns][/color][/SIZE]
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Postby Mr. Hat'n'Clogs » Sun Nov 29, 2009 10:53 am

Heh...I wonder who the musician is XP.

Nice poem though.
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Postby Tatsu » Sun Nov 29, 2009 11:53 am

Aha thank you Talitha :P I do like writing poems, but I really don't do it that often. O.o I draw a lot more than I write :P

and ahah thannnks Hat. xD To be truthful though, I actually came up with the beginning as I was in the car, and nothing/nobody was implied with this :P I just thought it was a cool concept
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Postby Mr. Hat'n'Clogs » Sun Nov 29, 2009 11:59 am

Sureeeeeee. It just happens to be a love story involving a musician. That's believable coming from you.
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Postby Tatsu » Sun Nov 29, 2009 12:05 pm

Lolz shut up! =P xD
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Postby talitha cumi » Sun Nov 29, 2009 10:05 pm

I smell something fishy.. hehe... You're definitely blessed to have such talent in writing.. can u teach me how to do stuffs like that??... haha.. keep writing!
[SIZE="1"][color="DarkOrange"]somewhere between the hot and the cold
somewhere between the new and the old
somewhere between who I am and who I used to be
somewhere in the middle, You'll find me...

somewhere between the wrong and the right
somewhere between the darkness and the light
somewhere between who I was and who You're making me
[color="Lime"][SIZE="4"]LORD[/SIZE][/color], somewhere in the middle, You'll find me...

[by Casting Crowns][/color][/SIZE]
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Postby Tatsu » Mon Nov 30, 2009 3:02 pm

haha xD Talitha youre funny :P

but, thank you :D I really appreciate that ^^ and...I guess so...? :P Unless that wasn't a serious question haha :P I'm not sure what you'd want me to do though O.o aha
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Postby talitha cumi » Tue Dec 01, 2009 6:44 am

If you'd bother knowing, I was born to be a clown! hehe :lol:

I just can't help being so humorous,aside from being so clumsy.. (that's part of my identity).. lolz!

I was wondering if you can be my ghostwriter 'cause I really am a frustrated writer.. I have many thoughts in mind but I can't write them on a paper (not because I don't have hands..:lol:).. It seems like my pen hates my paper..haha.. But seriously, I was just amazed by your poem that's why I asked that question (to make my reply a bit more longer).. Thanks for spending time of laughing at my out of this world humor.. I'm looking forward to know you more.. God bless!
[SIZE="1"][color="DarkOrange"]somewhere between the hot and the cold
somewhere between the new and the old
somewhere between who I am and who I used to be
somewhere in the middle, You'll find me...

somewhere between the wrong and the right
somewhere between the darkness and the light
somewhere between who I was and who You're making me
[color="Lime"][SIZE="4"]LORD[/SIZE][/color], somewhere in the middle, You'll find me...

[by Casting Crowns][/color][/SIZE]
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Postby Tatsu » Tue Dec 01, 2009 2:46 pm

Haha um..I hope I don't sound rude by saying this, and if I do then I apologize ;]
....But to me you just TOTALLY switched moods on me!! :P haha!!
when people put a lot of dots and stuff like that, it gives me the mood of monotony, unless I know the person of course.
and then you came back were all whoo! :D ahaha so it kinda caught me off guard! :P haha
and it's all good I love to be humurous also ;D haha

so...ghostwriter huh? :P I can kinda get the idea of what youre talking about, but, explain a bit more, maybe? What exactly does a "ghostwriter" do? ;P haha
But, if you wanted to I'd be happy to try and work with you, for anything you like :O aha just mention some things to me or somethin' :P
God bless you too! ;P
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Postby talitha cumi » Tue Dec 01, 2009 3:39 pm

haha.. It's alright.. I mean, I'm used to it.. I'm just basically complicated.. This is me and that is you.. We both can express ourselves the way we are..

A ghostwriter is someone who writes something for/with someone else.. For now, I don't know exactly what I wanted you to do for me but I just want to know if how "do you handle your ideas then write them that easily?" ..This is somehow a sort of survey..:P

Thanks a lot! God bless (as always)..
[SIZE="1"][color="DarkOrange"]somewhere between the hot and the cold
somewhere between the new and the old
somewhere between who I am and who I used to be
somewhere in the middle, You'll find me...

somewhere between the wrong and the right
somewhere between the darkness and the light
somewhere between who I was and who You're making me
[color="Lime"][SIZE="4"]LORD[/SIZE][/color], somewhere in the middle, You'll find me...

[by Casting Crowns][/color][/SIZE]
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Postby Tatsu » Tue Dec 01, 2009 6:57 pm

Haha of course :P

and ahhh I see :P Well, I would happy to help you if you wanted it. O.o granted im not sure how well I would do, but, I can. ;] aha

and hmm...how do i handle my ideas so easily....mm...well..I guess...you just have to get your mind and your heart straight on what your idea is. You can have a vague idea, of course, that's just how it begins. But then, you have to think what it is exactly you want in your story. What's the goal your reaching for, what kind of point are you trying to get across to the people who are reading it. Or, perhaps, what are you trying to do for yourself, what's the point thats in your head. I think that's basically the main point that you have to go off of :P
[font="Comic Sans MS"][SIZE="2"][color="RoyalBlue"]"Just remember, that when you look up at the stars at night, no matter how far away you are, we're both looking at the same thing."[/color][/SIZE][/font]

[font="Arial"][color="PaleTurquoise"]"Frowning, Chronicler opened his mouth, buth Bast held up a hand to stop him. 'No, listen. I've got it now. You meet a girl: shy, unassuming. If you tell her she's beautiful, she'll think you're sweet, but she won't believe you. She knows that beauty lies in your beholding.' Bast gave a grudging shrug. 'And sometimes that's enough.' His eyes brightened. 'But there's a better way. You show her she is beautiful. You make mirrors of your eyes, prayers of your hands against her body. It is hard, very hard, but when she truly believes you...' Bast gestured excitedly. 'Suddenly the story she tells herself in her own head changes. She transforms. She isn't [I]seen as [I]beautiful. She is [I]beautiful, seen.'"[/I][/I][/color][/I][/font]
[color="PaleTurquoise"]-The Name of the Wind[/color]
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Postby steenajack » Tue Dec 01, 2009 11:21 pm

Ooooooo!! I like that poem! Very nice and lovely! XD!!!!
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Postby Tatsu » Wed Dec 02, 2009 5:00 pm

steenajack (post: 1358769) wrote:Ooooooo!! I like that poem! Very nice and lovely! XD!!!!


:D aha, thank you!!
[font="Comic Sans MS"][SIZE="2"][color="RoyalBlue"]"Just remember, that when you look up at the stars at night, no matter how far away you are, we're both looking at the same thing."[/color][/SIZE][/font]

[font="Arial"][color="PaleTurquoise"]"Frowning, Chronicler opened his mouth, buth Bast held up a hand to stop him. 'No, listen. I've got it now. You meet a girl: shy, unassuming. If you tell her she's beautiful, she'll think you're sweet, but she won't believe you. She knows that beauty lies in your beholding.' Bast gave a grudging shrug. 'And sometimes that's enough.' His eyes brightened. 'But there's a better way. You show her she is beautiful. You make mirrors of your eyes, prayers of your hands against her body. It is hard, very hard, but when she truly believes you...' Bast gestured excitedly. 'Suddenly the story she tells herself in her own head changes. She transforms. She isn't [I]seen as [I]beautiful. She is [I]beautiful, seen.'"[/I][/I][/color][/I][/font]
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Postby talitha cumi » Thu Dec 03, 2009 5:55 am

thank you Tatsu.. that was a great help indeed..

oh, you were the owner of the thread "why hello there!" in "who's who" right???.. so, you were that happy person that I was referring to.. I'm just glad..hehe..
[SIZE="1"][color="DarkOrange"]somewhere between the hot and the cold
somewhere between the new and the old
somewhere between who I am and who I used to be
somewhere in the middle, You'll find me...

somewhere between the wrong and the right
somewhere between the darkness and the light
somewhere between who I was and who You're making me
[color="Lime"][SIZE="4"]LORD[/SIZE][/color], somewhere in the middle, You'll find me...

[by Casting Crowns][/color][/SIZE]
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Postby Tatsu » Thu Dec 03, 2009 3:40 pm

Lolz yep I was :P
[font="Comic Sans MS"][SIZE="2"][color="RoyalBlue"]"Just remember, that when you look up at the stars at night, no matter how far away you are, we're both looking at the same thing."[/color][/SIZE][/font]

[font="Arial"][color="PaleTurquoise"]"Frowning, Chronicler opened his mouth, buth Bast held up a hand to stop him. 'No, listen. I've got it now. You meet a girl: shy, unassuming. If you tell her she's beautiful, she'll think you're sweet, but she won't believe you. She knows that beauty lies in your beholding.' Bast gave a grudging shrug. 'And sometimes that's enough.' His eyes brightened. 'But there's a better way. You show her she is beautiful. You make mirrors of your eyes, prayers of your hands against her body. It is hard, very hard, but when she truly believes you...' Bast gestured excitedly. 'Suddenly the story she tells herself in her own head changes. She transforms. She isn't [I]seen as [I]beautiful. She is [I]beautiful, seen.'"[/I][/I][/color][/I][/font]
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Postby Phantom_Sorano » Tue Dec 08, 2009 12:06 am

I must say, Miss Tatsu, that I greatly enjoyed reading this poem. It is very well written with a good use of rhyme. The context of the poem is also very interesting and very well portrayed. I cannot wait to see more of your work--especially a Shakespearean styled sonnet. Haha!
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Postby Tatsu » Tue Dec 08, 2009 5:04 pm

Phantom_Sorano (post: 1359651) wrote:I must say, Miss Tatsu, that I greatly enjoyed reading this poem. It is very well written with a good use of rhyme. The context of the poem is also very interesting and very well portrayed. I cannot wait to see more of your work--especially a Shakespearean styled sonnet. Haha!


Haha why thank you!! :] I always enjoy hearing comments like that. ] aha
and lolz umm...I'll let you know when/if I get to that!! ;P haha
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[font="Arial"][color="PaleTurquoise"]"Frowning, Chronicler opened his mouth, buth Bast held up a hand to stop him. 'No, listen. I've got it now. You meet a girl: shy, unassuming. If you tell her she's beautiful, she'll think you're sweet, but she won't believe you. She knows that beauty lies in your beholding.' Bast gave a grudging shrug. 'And sometimes that's enough.' His eyes brightened. 'But there's a better way. You show her she is beautiful. You make mirrors of your eyes, prayers of your hands against her body. It is hard, very hard, but when she truly believes you...' Bast gestured excitedly. 'Suddenly the story she tells herself in her own head changes. She transforms. She isn't [I]seen as [I]beautiful. She is [I]beautiful, seen.'"[/I][/I][/color][/I][/font]
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