Hi, Siren here. I'm finally writing more poetry! This is my latest work.
The Angel from Out of Town
I was waiting for tomorrow
Hoping that it would come soon.
My heart was cold as stone.
Then I saw you and it melted
As the rain came pouring down
But there you were just standing
The loveliest I'd ever seen
Strange clothes you wore, could it be?
An Angel from Out of Town
As our eyes met there standing in the rain
Your gaze pierced my soul and
You read me like an open book
As our eyes parted ways
You sported a little smile
Then you turned and walked away
The Angel from Out of Town
I turned around to follow
To ask you for your name
But when I turned
You had gone
The Angel from Out of Town
The sun came out, the rain stopped
A dove flew in the air
Over the hills and far away
Were you really there?
The Angel from Out of Town
Please tell me what you think
Siren's poetry book
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Siren's poetry book
"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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Cool. 
(Sorry... I'm no poetry critic. 
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Thanks. Anybody else?
"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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I love it! 
It made me cry...
It made me cry...In a world shrouded in mystery, the winds of change begin to blow.
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Taslin_Jewel - Posts: 342
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Very pretty. ^_^ Nice imagery.
"So David said to Michal, "It was before the LORD, who chose me instead of your father and all his house, to appoint me ruler over the people of the LORD, over Israel. Therefore I will play music before the LORD. And I will be even more undignified than this, and will be humble in my own sight. But as for the maidservants of whom you have spoken, by them I will be held in honor."
2 Samuel 6: 21&22
"I am going to take this bucket of water and pour it on the flames of hell, and then I am going to use this torch to burn down the gates of paradise so that people will not love God for want of heaven or fear of hell, but because He is God."
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nice! I love angels! XD! and I love this poem! *glomps you*
[color="DimGray"]I don't believe that I would die if I saw you face to face;
but that my spirit would become so alive it took my body's place.
- Danya[/color]
but that my spirit would become so alive it took my body's place.
- Danya[/color]
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Imagery? Imagery? O.O
*gets elbowed by taslin*
oh that imagery
(>.> <.< What imagery?!?!)
*gets elbowed by taslin*
oh that imagery
(>.> <.< What imagery?!?!)
"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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Siren is entering this poem in a local poetry contest, and she's really nervous about it.
They announce the results on the 26th, so keep your fingers crossed and wish her luck!
They announce the results on the 26th, so keep your fingers crossed and wish her luck!
In a world shrouded in mystery, the winds of change begin to blow.
A proud member of Star Wars: The Mandalorian Wars and Darklight: Chronicles of Tairis.
"I'm a warrior-hero-adventurer-goddess who CAN'T SWIM, okay?!?!" ~Skye of Lynlora, from the video game Darkened Skye
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Hope you the best, Siren. ^_^ EDIT: BTW, I liked your poem.
[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE
You see into the deepest part of me ---
beyond the fog I hide behind.
You cast your light upon the shadows
that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.
You ease the pain when I am hurting,
and morbid visions from my past
pierce into the realm of Reason
as though I danced on blades of glass.
You grant me strength when I have fallen
and, once again, I've lost my way.
You take my hand in Yours and lead me
into the promise of a brand new day.
You bring order to all my chaos,
yet set my well-laid plans awry.
You place me on a firm foundation ---
then give me wings so I can fly.
You sand away my roughened edges
and polish all the dullest parts
until I stand before Your presence...
a newly-sculpted work of art.
You see into the heart within me,
right through my motives and selfish will.
And yet, in spite of all You see
You say You love me even still.
~by D.M.~
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true_noir_chloe - Posts: 3091
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A new poem I have written called "Broken Promise"
Broken Promise
I walked into school that day
that's when I saw you
When you sat in front of me in class
All I could do was write your name
I remember it so clearly
When you asked me to the prom
I blushed and I was tongue tied
But I managed to stammer yes
I remember us in college
Two love birds in a tree
I remember when the war started
and took you away from me
You promised to come back for me
How gullible you were
To think the promise you made there
Was a promise you could keep
My story is a sad one
so don't get it in your head
that all stories have happy endings
You'd have to eat what you had said
Here I am still waiting
As 20 years go by
I look in the window just to see his face
His broken promise sour on my lips
How could I have been so stupid
To believe in happy endings
Love is like a rotten egg
love is never fair!
I walked into school that day
that's when I saw you
When you sat in front of me in class
All I could do was write your name
I remember it so clearly
When you asked me to the prom
I blushed and I was tongue tied
But I managed to stammer yes
I remember us in college
Two love birds in a tree
I remember when the war started
and took you away from me
You promised to come back for me
How gullible you were
To think the promise you made there
Was a promise you could keep
My story is a sad one
so don't get it in your head
that all stories have happy endings
You'd have to eat what you had said
Here I am still waiting
As 20 years go by
I look in the window just to see his face
His broken promise sour on my lips
How could I have been so stupid
To believe in happy endings
Love is like a rotten egg
love is never fair!
"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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Aww. So sad. You did very well, Siren! *high-five*
"So David said to Michal, "It was before the LORD, who chose me instead of your father and all his house, to appoint me ruler over the people of the LORD, over Israel. Therefore I will play music before the LORD. And I will be even more undignified than this, and will be humble in my own sight. But as for the maidservants of whom you have spoken, by them I will be held in honor."
2 Samuel 6: 21&22
"I am going to take this bucket of water and pour it on the flames of hell, and then I am going to use this torch to burn down the gates of paradise so that people will not love God for want of heaven or fear of hell, but because He is God."
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Siren has been glomped
Siren: thanks for imput
Siren: thanks for imput
"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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You are a very VERY good poet. You should develope it and maybe it can become a way to express yourself. You also have very good rhythm. The phrases you use flow like song. Good job.
I am a brother to dragons, and a companion to owls.
-Job 30:29
-Job 30:29
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That was sad! But I liked it.
In a world shrouded in mystery, the winds of change begin to blow.
A proud member of Star Wars: The Mandalorian Wars and Darklight: Chronicles of Tairis.
"I'm a warrior-hero-adventurer-goddess who CAN'T SWIM, okay?!?!" ~Skye of Lynlora, from the video game Darkened Skye
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Anison Twilight wrote:You are a very VERY good poet. You should develope it and maybe it can become a way to express yourself. You also have very good rhythm. The phrases you use flow like song. Good job.
thanks anison. here's a limerick I wrote for class hope you like it.
Ned's Head
There once was a boy named Ned
Who was lying asleep in his bed
When some ceiling fell down
He wore a sad frown
For he now had a bump on his head
There once was a boy named Ned
Who was lying asleep in his bed
When some ceiling fell down
He wore a sad frown
For he now had a bump on his head
This is my only poem with a happy ending.
Taslin: Happy ending? What happy ending?
"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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Wisdom of stars
The sky with immortal bonds
Will not last forever
Even a rock cold and hard
Will one day change
A river will alter it's course
to run down to the sea
At the end of every storm
There is a rainbow
Every cloud, no matter how dark
has A silver lining
On the day when everything comes to change
remember that...
Stars are mortal beings too
And one by one they will fall
No longer shining
Into darkness
Fo remember...
Do not be afraid of change
But like a cloud, look for the silver lining
So remember that...
Death is just another rain storm
And look for the rainbow beyond
The sky with immortal bonds
Will not last forever
Even a rock cold and hard
Will one day change
A river will alter it's course
to run down to the sea
At the end of every storm
There is a rainbow
Every cloud, no matter how dark
has A silver lining
On the day when everything comes to change
remember that...
Stars are mortal beings too
And one by one they will fall
No longer shining
Into darkness
Fo remember...
Do not be afraid of change
But like a cloud, look for the silver lining
So remember that...
Death is just another rain storm
And look for the rainbow beyond
this is a peom yah please comment
"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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SWEET! Another great poem by Siren!
Luke was here.
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Very good. There was one portion that I think could be edited
I think you could leave out the >>but dull<<, as it doesn't really add anything and it kinda throws off the flow.
That's just my two cents, good poem.
Stars are mortal beings too
And one by one they will fall
No longer shining
But dull
Into darkness
And one by one they will fall
No longer shining
But dull
Into darkness
I think you could leave out the >>but dull<<, as it doesn't really add anything and it kinda throws off the flow.
That's just my two cents, good poem.
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edited as requested icarus
"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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