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Space Detective Go-Go Story version

PostPosted: Fri May 07, 2004 5:02 pm
by Hitokiri
I decided to write out my current manga: Space Detective Go-Go into written form from the manga.

I've written alot of fan fics but stopped cause they dot dry and boring after a while. This is based of my own creation. You might find this similar to Trigun, Outlaw Star, and Cowboy Bebop....cause it is :lol:

So here we go!

I will post up th enext chapter if you guys like it. Please comment or crticize on it.
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Space Detective Go-Go!


Prologue

Space. What is space? In this entire vastness, what’s out there, whose out there? Questions that are needed answering yet, no one knows. What fate lies in front of our paths? Will be drawn into space like moths to a light? The New Frontier. Space. Guided by the stars, many set off to answer these unknown questions only to be never seen again. So how does this relate to our story and to the space detective whose ignoring his past and making what he can of life?

ABSOLUTELY NOTHING!!!!



Space Log 1: Space Detective, what a life.


Time: 8:45 P.m. Year Unknown. Julia City, Planet Aries.


“Im bored.â€

PostPosted: Tue May 11, 2004 7:04 pm
by true_noir_chloe
Would you like a critique? If you would I'll give you one. If not, then I liked it. It was ok. ^_^

This was my favorite section: >>ABSOLUTELY NOTHING!!!!


I have one question: Were you trying to write this in script format or in prose?

PostPosted: Tue May 11, 2004 7:09 pm
by Hitokiri
Yeah sure critique it...or criticize it. That will help my writing much better,

I'm pretty much taking the manga I drew and transferring into writing form (of course I made some changes to several areas.)

PostPosted: Wed May 12, 2004 7:44 pm
by Icarus
I like the style. All that careful explanation, just to say it has nothing to do with the story. I love it.

Oh, there is one thing. when he changes the clip in his gun, I'd recommend eliminating the last two boxes. Redundancy isn't good unless you want to emphasize that one word. Or if there is no other term for it.

PostPosted: Thu May 13, 2004 1:18 pm
by Hitokiri
seeing as I have ...some.. support I will continue to Chapter 2.

PostPosted: Mon Jun 07, 2004 5:00 pm
by starstoryteller
I like it very much...let me guess the only one who can read the map is a...girl.
I love the style of charaters you have. Graham is lovable but tuff and abit mysterus? ^^