Hi! Here is my fantasy novel. Constructive criticism and other comments are ALWAYS welcome!
Please be warned that:
1. This is a PG-13 novel for violence and possibly in the future some mild sexual content.
2. This is a first draft that I barely read over twice. Translation: I know this editing but I'm too busy/lazy.
3. I am a recreational writer. I know my writing is not award-winning fiction, and I frankly don't care.
4. I have been working this story for years, and I will not finish it until at least next year, possibly longer. I do very little writing during college semesters because I get so busy.
I hope you like it!
Prologue
Once every century, a star would fall from the sky and spend the rest of its few days in life among the three kingdoms of men. The world of men was always eager for the visits from the stars, for the stars always gave gifts to men that filled their world with life and beauty and magic. But the coming of a star always preceded the death of a star, and the stars could never stay for long.
Then, a strange thing happened: the stars went to war against each other. A certain star led a rebellion against the King, the greatest star, whose light was too great to be borne by the eyes of any living creature. The rebellious star was hurled from the sky prematurely, and so came into the world of men, but he gave different gifts from the previous gifts of the celestial citizens.
To Falronia, the Kingdom of the Sky, he gave the gift of power, extraordinary power over fire and water, air and stone, light and even aether, the very material of which the stars were made. The Falron emperor came to believe they were superior to the other kingdoms, and alienated the other kingdoms with selfish and dastardly policies.
Finally, Falronia found herself at war with all of the other three kingdoms. The king of the Rillion, the Kingdom of Earth, united the world of men against the Falrons. It is now said that there will never again be a force so terrible as the union of those three kings, King Trellicus of Earth, King Inroco of the Sun, and King Chraitin of the Forest. They were so beloved by their people that that they were called, “The Heroes.â€