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my new poem thread

PostPosted: Sun Jun 22, 2008 8:38 pm
by Althaia
hey guys i am back with poetry well.. poem/song for now here you go

Fly on Wings of Glass

I'm flying high
never thinking
its always clicking

flying with wings of glass
they begin crack
I'm getting off track
they start to shatter
i feel like the Mad Hatter

trying not to fall
i'm running into a wall
let me stand tall

let these broken wings heal
do not leave me here broken
Pull me up, oh Father
and make me whole again

hope you guys like it

PostPosted: Mon Jun 23, 2008 2:10 pm
by Hana Ryuuzaki
[font="palatino Linotype"]This is beautiful, Altha-chan.
*nods*

I really like the imagery of glass.....[/font]

PostPosted: Mon Jun 23, 2008 2:25 pm
by Kunoichi
very nice ^_^

and i like your rhyme scheme..I never could get that right so nice job!

PostPosted: Mon Jun 23, 2008 6:41 pm
by Althaia
thanks guys and if you have any ideas from more poetry pm me kay

PostPosted: Sat Jun 28, 2008 6:23 pm
by Althaia
heres another one guys

Why?

why!?
why can't you see
what you're doing
doing to me
doing to yourself?!

don't let yourself
become enveloped in sadness
you need to know


i'm am here if you need me
you just have to call
raise your hand
and i will help you

you just need
to give me a chance

Why do you care about
what happens to me?


you are my freind
you are like a sibling
so please don't do this


there you go another one

PostPosted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 5:44 pm
by Althaia
[color="DeepSkyBlue"]The Sea
the sea is as vast as my love for you
the sea with all its might
and all of its depth
shows what i mean
love can be rough
like a storm
whipping across
the sea
and yet
it can be calm
as the sea
when there is
no cloud in the sky
so my dear one
rember the sea
represents our love[/color]

PostPosted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 5:48 pm
by Hana Ryuuzaki
[font="palatino Linotype"]I like the imagery of both of these poems.

They're really thought-provoking....[/font]

PostPosted: Sat Aug 16, 2008 11:36 am
by Althaia
Broken Hearts
as walk i see
so much hurt
so little care

i feel their pain
but at the same time
i don't

for i know
we are all loved
by one man

someone who loves
guides
cares for us

so we won't fall
so we stand tall

that man
is my
Lord
Father
Savior
and
Friend