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words for someone

PostPosted: Wed Nov 26, 2003 4:15 pm
by Angelchick
Glass breaking finger cut and bleeding like your soul lifes hard nobody said it was easy but i know you can get through anything now your healing theirs still a scar i can see the pain from everything that happened to you cold blood shot eyes wondering why it had to be this way i'm trying to help but i don't know what to do i just hope things get better for you

thats a poem i wrote. tell me what you think of it. it's sort of about someone and sort of just made up. i don't know what to call it. so if you have any ideas you can tell me them.

PostPosted: Wed Nov 26, 2003 4:33 pm
by Razgriz
It has really good substance to it, it's very good. One suggestion would be to put it in stanza form (or whatever it's called), it would make it easier to read. Keep writing!