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Postby Mr. SmartyPants » Wed Feb 01, 2006 9:11 pm

"Fiction"

I found myself in a place well known to me,
I knew this place by heart.
I've been at this place for three years now,
Soon to be four.

The days are the same,
Go, study, work, listen, write, eat.
The days never change,
They are always the same.

The people are the same,
Talking amongst themselves.
Laughing, eating, studying
Together...

They go to class,
Sit down in their seats.
They ask questions
Together....

They walk out of class,
With their heavy bookbags
They chat with each other to their next class
Together...

They walk to their class...
Together...
They eat their lunch...
Together...
They Study, Work, Play, Run, Read
Together... Together... and Together...

Together...
It's always together for them...
Everyday...
Each and everyday...

I walk to my class...
Alone...
I eat my lunch...
Alone...
I Study, Work, Play, Run, Read
Alone... Alone... and Alone...

Alone
It's always alone for me...
Everyday...
Each and Everyday...

I go up to them
Ask a simple question
"Do you know who I am?"
"No" They reply

"I have been here as long as you have"
"How could you not regonize me"
"I do not know you, sorry" They reply
"Leave me alone now, I got to go to class"

Nobody know's me
Nobody recognizes me
Nobody remembers me
What am I?

My nothingness
My unacknowledgement
My nonexistance
Renders me fictional

That's all I am

I'm just fictional
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Postby Yumie » Thu Feb 02, 2006 4:35 pm

Nice, Ryan, I like that final line especially!
Be Thou my Vision, O Lord of my heart;
Naught be all else to me, save that Thou art
Thou my best Thought, by day or by night,
Waking or sleeping, Thy presence my light.

Be Thou my Wisdom, and Thou my true Word;
I ever with Thee and Thou with me, Lord;
Thou my great Father, I Thy true son;
Thou in me dwelling, and I with Thee one.

Be Thou my battle Shield, Sword for the fight;
Be Thou my Dignity, Thou my Delight;
Thou my soul’s Shelter, Thou my high Tower:
Raise Thou me heavenward, O Power of my power.

Riches I heed not, nor man’s empty praise,
Thou mine Inheritance, now and always:
Thou and Thou only, first in my heart,
High King of Heaven, my Treasure Thou art.

High King of Heaven, my victory won,
May I reach Heaven’s joys, O bright Heaven’s Sun!
Heart of my own heart, whatever befall,
Still be my Vision, O Ruler of all.
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Postby Kami » Thu Feb 02, 2006 4:40 pm

O_O Wow. I really enjoy reading your poems ! They're so good, I like how the stanzas don't always rhyme. ^_^ Keep up the awesome work !

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Postby SnoringFrog » Thu Feb 02, 2006 4:57 pm

Very nice poem, I liked it.
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Postby bakura_fan » Thu Feb 02, 2006 5:19 pm

wow. nice.
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Postby Linksquest » Thu Feb 02, 2006 8:00 pm

Yayness! ... FREE VERSE PEOPLE! its called free verse (non rhyming poems... <_<) I really liked the ending. yes, i do see the influence of MONSTER in it. though, i still think its similar to my poem, lol. YAYNESS! you must writes mores of t3h fictionzorz
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Postby ChristianKitsune » Thu Feb 02, 2006 8:06 pm

aww that's so sad! but it's really good Ryan! ^^ I loved it!
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