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Crazy Saint (temporary title)
PostPosted: Wed Dec 07, 2005 1:09 pm
by KA1-EG13
I am soon to post the first few chapters, of my experimental manga plot line Crazy Saint (has anyone taken that name yet?)
The story begins around christmas time, starting with Dorathy, a teenage rebel nicknamed "Pork", loses her bestfriend "Beans". After a few weeks of mourning she take off a few days before christmas, and never come home again.
Thats when she meets Jynx. A slightly mentaly handicapped kid, with a literal chrome dome, and a electric personality.
Expect the 1st chapter to come out in about a week or two. (It'll get here sooner or later.)
Chow.
PostPosted: Wed Dec 07, 2005 1:17 pm
by Kanerou
Interesting.
*blinks* Sure you don't mean "ciao"?
PostPosted: Fri Dec 09, 2005 6:43 am
by KA1-EG13
Ciao...yeah that it, ciao...>>
I always thought it was Chow. Oh, well.
PostPosted: Fri Dec 09, 2005 6:46 am
by Kanerou
'S alright. I didn't know what the heck it was when I first saw it many years back. Couldn't figure out how to pronounce it. ^_^;
Crazy Saint Ep.1 introduction
PostPosted: Tue Dec 20, 2005 9:44 am
by KA1-EG13
Finaly the first part of Ep.1 one is here. I know I should have done a little more, like I dunno, finish the whole episode, but since I'm a big procrastanator I'm going to post what I have anyways, and hopefully that will be enough to get me to commit to finishing this whole episode at least.
Feel free to point out any errors.
Crazy Saint
Ep.1 Clay Shatter
by Keenan Grimes
Alone and in the dark a raven haired girl, dressed in black, sits with her chin resting on the dinner table. She stares at a can of pork and beans, with no expression on her face. Her mind is numb, as she tries to drown the pain away with the oblivion of silence, but to no avail. Her mental suicide is disrupted by the chirping of birds outside the window of the kitchen, causing a flood of unwanted memories.
A year ago in September, the same girl lied down in the middle of her room talking to her best friend Geena Steiner. Both of the girls were social outcasts. The raven haired girl, Dorothy, was a reject by choice, but Geena was kept out of the social cliques due her looks. The girls were best of friends, and were dubbed by all as "Pork" and "Beans" but, they didn't really care, however. They even decided to accept "Pork and Beans" as their nicknames and used them quite often.
Geena was walking around the room wrapping her finger in her blonde hair. She kept on walking circles around the room, and unintentionally succeeded at drawing worry and concern out of Dorothy. "This carpet is new you know, so stop wearing a hole in it and sit down. What's worrying you any way, Beans? I know you got something on your mind."
Geena face went a little pale and then returned to normal. She sat on the edge of Dorothy’s bed with her hands clasp and her head down. "Well, yeah there has been something I was meaning to tell you," Geena said.
Dorothy sat up and then said, "Well spill the beans, Beans."
Geena began to clumsily tell Dorothy those two days ago when her parents took her to church, that she began to feel a strange conviction for her sins that she never felt before. As the pastor taught about the life, death and resurrection of Jesus Christ, Geena started to feel a tugging at her heart and at the end of the service the pastor asked that everyone who would like to receive Jesus as their Lord and Savior, to walk down the aisle so that they could pray the sinners prayer and start a new life in Christ. "So I decided to walk down the aisle," Geena explained, "And I prayed the sinner’s prayer with the pastor, and I accepted Jesus as Lord and Savior."
Dorothy was thoroughly shocked to hear her best friend just tell her that she was a Christian now. She always knew that her parents "forced" her to go to church, and Geena never really had a heart for anything churchy, so she was puzzled as to why her friend turned such a new leaf.
When Beans saw the surprised expression on Dorothy’s face she cringed a bit and then said, "Surprised?" in a sheepish manner.
"Well, yeah I am surprised," Dorothy said, "I mean it's not like I have a problem with you becoming a Christian or anything, your religion is your business, but I would just like to know why you had the change of heart. They didn't brainwash you, did they?"
"No they didn't," Geena said somewhat offended, "Its just while I was in that pew I felt, I dunno, drawn by God. I think it’s what’s called being convicted by the Holy Spirit, or at least that’s what the pastor calls it. What I do know is that when I sincerely accepted Jesus Christ into my life I feel wonderful.â€
PostPosted: Wed Jan 04, 2006 1:08 pm
by KA1-EG13
Hello, its been a week or two since I've posted anything else on my story.
This is due to the fact that those last two weeks were christmas break and my CPU was not present within my household to use for posting the rest of my story...again.
the next of the chapter/episode thingy will be soon completed....hopefully.
PostPosted: Sun Feb 05, 2006 9:28 pm
by KA1-EG13
2nd part of the first episode continued...FINALLY!
Dorathy, began to work her way up to the skate park hoping to skate of her troubles like usual. Upset that Beans wasn't coming with her, because she had more "important things to do", Dorathy absentmindedly started to go down the wrong street. After about five minutes of walking she realized that she had completly gone in the wrong direction and started beating her self on the head.
"Idiot, get your head out of your rear!" Dorathy metally yelled at herself, as she began to go in the other direction.
As she walked, however, she came to a crowded street corner that she could have sworn wasn't crowded earlier. Apparantly a street magician of some sort had just recently came out and attracted the crowd.
"Hey, how did you do that! Thats freaking awsome!" a teenager randomly blurted out among the crowd. It seemed that the magician had removed the teen's watch while doing a card trick and made it reappear in the kid's other hand while he wasn't looking.
Curious, Pork worked her way through the crowd to get a look at the spectacle. She saw that the young magician was about the same age as her, mabe younger, and that he wore a white floppy top hat that's top and brim were black. He wore a bright neon green shirt with a black trim, a long red scarf, and the standard jeans with brown slip on shoes. The floppy top hat was pulled over his eyes where the only thing sticking out was his nose and mouth, so when he did his magic tricks, he did them essentialy blind.
"Now for next tricky trick, I needing volteer," the magician said, butchering the english language, "You there! On your wrist, what it is?"
Dorathy, taken aback by his crude use of english, responded, "Er...just some braclets...why?"
"Lemme see, lemme see! I show good tricky," the magician said.
"Um..ok," Dorathy responded, giving the kid magician her bracelts.
The magician took them and then said, "Now, beholden my magic staff!" The magician flipped his wrist around and with slight of hand pulled out a small magic wand. After doing so, he extended the wand into a staff about the same hight as the magician. He then put his hands out and said, "Now all back up, back up or you be getting thwaked by my magic staffy staff."
Every one gave the magician the space he requested not sure exactly what he was going to do. He put the staff through the loops of the braclets, and held the staff up so all could see the braclets on the staff sitting ontop of his hand that was holding the staff. Then he placed his other hand on the staff and turned it horizontally were the braclets were between his hands holding the staff.
"Be amazeded by my zappy quick speed!", the magician said as he bagan to spin the staff in his hand and around his body like bo fighters do in many kung-fu movies.
The speed of the staff was such that it appeared as a blur to the audiance watching, and after a good while of spinning the staff, the magician abruptly stopped the mock martial arts exibition and held the staff in both hands, horizontaly for everyone to see. The six braclets that started out in the middle of his hands holding the staff had now shifted. Three on the outside of his right, and three on the outside to his left, with none in the middle as previously.
The crowd appluaded, but the magician wasn't done yet. He began spinning the stick again in the same manner and when he stopped, he held the staff horizontaly in his hands as prevoius, but only this time all six hands were on the outside of the right hand. He repeated this again and the end result was all six braclets on the outside of his left hand, and repeated it for another time with the end result of all six braclets were on the inside of both hands. For one last time, he reapeated the spinning stick exibition faster and in a more flashy fashion than before. When the stick abruptly stopped in both hands horizontaly, all six braclets had completly disappeared.
The crowd applauded again, more fervantly and some donated cash into the magicians money plate. The magican bowed to his audiance and began to do another trick with a different person, but was interuppted by Dorathy.
"Hey, arn't you going to give me back my bracelts?"
"Oh, your bracylets? I nearly forget. Hmm...they should be here," the magician said as he searched his person. As he searched though, he acted as if he had to sneeze. So he covered his mouth and performed a mock sneeze. When he did he chirped, "Hey I found them!"
The illusion was such that it appeared he sneezed the braclets out from his mouth. He handed the braclets over to Dorathy, though she was reluctant to recieve them, and began to enterain more people.
(Thats it for now....hopefully I don't have too many grammatical errors. I'll come back later and fix any that I find..mabe. Part three coming up...sooner or later.)