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Sorrow's Song

PostPosted: Fri May 20, 2005 6:34 am
by Felix
Um...ok. I'm not even sure what this is about, and I don't even really understand it, but it just hit me last night and all the words sprang into my head so I wrote it down and felt like I should put it on here to see what you guys think. It's probably nothing, but I felt I should share it.

Sorrow’s Song
Dim faces fly by,
Bringing bitter regret,
Full of lost hopes,
That I’d rather forget,

How could this be?
That I’m feeling so down,
When near and where distant,
Love floats all around,

I try and reach out,
To hold it, embrace it,
But all my touch does,
Is mar it, deface it,

My heart is so barren:
A well long dried up,
My soul screams for comfort:
A lost frightened pup,

There’s a thick sheet of ice,
Blocking me from the world,
Causing perception,
To crumble and swirl,

I yearn for the clarity,
Of what’s hidden deep,
The secrets lie waiting,
Alone and asleep,

My sorrow sings sweetly,
Pushed on by my pain,
My wounds they bleed freely,
Like soft crimson rain,

I’m past comprehension,
I wander alone,
With nothing to cherish,
No place to call home,

I’m sure there’s still something,
As hopeless this seems,
A place to find safety,
To unfurl my wings,

The sorrow will drain out,
Replaced soon by peace,
It’s patience I need now,
To reach sweet relief...

PostPosted: Fri May 20, 2005 5:43 pm
by Danyasaur
oooo, me likies *^5s* great job dude ^_^

PostPosted: Sat May 21, 2005 6:58 pm
by christianfriend
WHOA!! Thats awsome Felix!! BRAVO!! *claps* I realy like it ^___^d

PostPosted: Sat May 21, 2005 7:02 pm
by Felix
^o^ Yay! Thanks! it means a lot because I'm not that good a writer. ^^;;

PostPosted: Sat May 21, 2005 7:10 pm
by christianfriend
O_O WHAT?!!! ARE YOU CRAZY?!?!?! Your a GREAT writer!! Has anyone ever complimented you on your Rping skills?! They rock!

PostPosted: Sat May 21, 2005 7:17 pm
by Felix
:red: well I AM crazy...but...THANKS! If you say so...than maybe I am! I DO like to write! ^-^ and you really think my RPing is good? Ah thanks a bunch! Yours are better though! ^^

PostPosted: Sat May 21, 2005 7:18 pm
by christianfriend
Nuh-uh! You are way better at Rping than me ^-^ And you know it!

PostPosted: Sat May 21, 2005 7:35 pm
by Felix
u.u we could argue about this till the world ends....how about we just say we're both equal, fair? ^^

PostPosted: Sat May 21, 2005 7:40 pm
by christianfriend
<.< >.>..hmmm...ok..deal...*both shake hands*

PostPosted: Sat May 21, 2005 8:04 pm
by haru_bay_nay
O.O Whoa. That's...really good. Way better than my poems. :sweat: You really convey emotions well. And I especially like your choice of rhyme scheme. Have you ever studied poetry in English? If not, I'm even more impressed!

Dude... It'd be cool if you posted some more if you write new ones! I'll totally read 'em! Way to go! :thumb: :rock:

PostPosted: Sat May 21, 2005 8:23 pm
by Felix
^-^ Thanks so much for your compliments! And no...I never took poetry...except for about 2 weeks. I'm glad you like it and I'll try to write more! ^^

PostPosted: Sat May 21, 2005 8:37 pm
by christianfriend
*_* You better write more! or theres gonna be trouble..

PostPosted: Sun May 22, 2005 12:26 pm
by haru_bay_nay
You're welcome! ...And yesh, write more or I'll have no choice but to send the ninja hamsters to "motivate" you!! >_>

PostPosted: Mon May 23, 2005 6:53 am
by Felix
*laughing at the quotes in haru's sig and the "frightening" threats of the two girls above* ^__^ haha...ok you two, settle down. I'll write more soon ^^

PostPosted: Mon May 23, 2005 10:52 am
by christianfriend
\*_*/ YESH! >.> both our threats worked! *Gives Haru_bay_nay a high five*

PostPosted: Wed May 25, 2005 11:08 pm
by kumiko213
wow...that is REALLY good!!! u should keep writing!!!!

PostPosted: Thu May 26, 2005 7:20 am
by Felix
^^ I will, I will...I'm playing around with a few ideas...so I should have something else up soon. :thumb:

PostPosted: Thu May 26, 2005 1:41 pm
by Kawaiikneko
*GAAASSSPPP* DAN!!! You have like... natural talent to write poems! That was so beautiful *o*

Has linda read this?? She'd love it too.

PostPosted: Thu May 26, 2005 3:23 pm
by Sakura15
That was awesome! Great job!
:thumb:

PostPosted: Thu May 26, 2005 7:38 pm
by Felix
Thanks you guys! :hug: And yep, Linda read it...I think she was too in shock to post a reply :lol: