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2 Corinthians 4:18
So fix our eyes not on what is seen but what is unseen. For what is seen is temporary but what is unseen is eternal.

Prelude
If asked, Gwen Pride would say she had it all. She was popular, rich, and had many friends and even a super cute boyfriend. So how come she felt so empty? This is her story, about how he changed her life forever…
Chapter 1: The Price of Being a Brat.
It was the last day of school finally! Gwen walked home with her boyfriend hand in hand.
“So I will see you when you get back from Paris with you Dad right?â€

Chapter 2: The Unwanted Hero
“Hey there beautiful. You’re that Pride girl right? How much money have ya got on ya?â€

[quote="faithfighter"]Chapter 2: The Unwanted Hero
“Hey there beautiful. You’re that Pride girl right? How much money have ya got on ya?â€

[quote="faithfighter"]“That’s because he is behind you.â€

Ssjjvash wrote:This is good so far, but this paragraph kinda confused me because you mixed first person with third person point of view.

Yep, its great

Lol, same here, that paragraph confused me a bit.

Ssjjvash wrote:This is good so far, but this paragraph kinda confused me because you mixed first person with third person point of view.

Actually, it switched to first a couple of times. Once then and once at the very end.
So far so good, just keep an eye on your tenses.

thats why yoou should never write at 1:00 in the morning..and always proof read...I am so bad about that...I will clear it up later..sorry no time now..but i will rewrite that..glad yoou liked it though. oh and never rush progress...3 things I learned from this not so wonderful story *sigh*

That's understandable if it was one in the morning!! ^^ The story really isn't that bad, though. We await the rest. *salutes*

yes it was 1 in the morning..or later...Ican't rember...I should be up late like that..but...*sigh*
any way writers block has taken this story to...ahhhhhhhhh!