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about him

PostPosted: Tue May 17, 2005 7:08 pm
by faithfighter
Mandy gazed out the car window. Her new school stood ominously in front of her. She pushed the car door open and stepped out into the fresh autumn air. The car drove off destroying any thoughts of escape. This was her school now and here she must stay. She looked it over again. It was a tall brick building covered with vines. There were five steps leading up to the huge red, foreboding doors. She took a deep breath and reluctantly went up the steps. She looked through the dirt-covered windows. Inside students strolled the halls looking around the school possibly locating their new classes or just exploring out of curiosity. She pushed on the door, and stepped inside. She walked over to the mane desk.
“Hello, I am Mandy Drew. May I ask…â€

PostPosted: Wed May 18, 2005 8:39 am
by starwarsboy90
Sounds interesting, write some more!!

PostPosted: Wed May 18, 2005 9:55 am
by Sakura15
Great Job FF-chan! :thumb:

PostPosted: Wed May 18, 2005 10:12 am
by girlninja
LOL ^^ faithfighter~sama excellent ^^ hehe keep writing ^_^

PostPosted: Wed May 18, 2005 1:29 pm
by ShiroiHikari
Nice description. I'd like to read more, if you have more written.

PostPosted: Wed May 18, 2005 2:04 pm
by faithfighter
Thanks guys!! More to come today (hopefully) ok!

PostPosted: Sun May 22, 2005 12:45 pm
by haru_bay_nay
Good! The only thing I think you could improve on is a couple of spelling and grammatical errors, but other than that, it's great! Keep up the good work! :thumb:

PostPosted: Sun May 22, 2005 2:38 pm
by faithfighter
I am the worst speller I know..I must appoligize. sorry. but I am working on it...I should proff read before I post...

PostPosted: Fri Jun 24, 2005 8:55 pm
by faithfighter
its been a terribly long time since i have wrote on this one..writers bloack...sorry, but i have a little bit mroe so here...to let you know I am working on it, here is the begining of the next chapter its not much but more is coming
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Mandy lay on her bed staring at the ceiling, her roommate had finally left and she was now alone. Her mind went over the events leading to this day. She couldn’t help but think this a terrible injustice. She never wanted to come here and had never wanted what had caused her uncle to send her here, but this was where her uncle thought she should be. Mandy felt bitter tears sting her eyes, why did this have to happen?