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Brand Spizzankin' New Poem
PostPosted: Sun Apr 03, 2005 4:48 pm
by Rachel
Hey everyone, boy it's been a while since I posted a poem on here. Anyways, here is one that I finally finished just a few days ago. It's different from most of my other ones (read: not depressing) , so I hope y'all will still enjoy it.
Unspoken Lullabies
Yesterday I said hello and
I wanted you to hear just how I feel
through words I cannot say
and though there are none to let you know
I wrote a song for you today
and I played it till my fingers bled
and this bullet that I'd take for you
will be melted down into a cage
that will not let me go
that will not let me speak
what you have never known
and what I have never said
is that I would die a thousand times
to be free of this cage
and be able to say these words
instead of just hello
PostPosted: Sun Apr 03, 2005 5:54 pm
by Angel37
Wow...since when did you know my life like that? I like!
<3 Angel
PostPosted: Sun Apr 03, 2005 7:29 pm
by Mr. SmartyPants
i like that!
PostPosted: Mon Apr 04, 2005 12:45 pm
by Photosoph
Very deep and meaningful. Excellent.
PostPosted: Mon Apr 04, 2005 12:49 pm
by true_noir_chloe
Wow, this break from writing you took did wonders. I'd say this is your best work so far, Rachel, my friend... sorry, my homefry. ~_^
Please, write some more. ^______^
PostPosted: Mon Apr 04, 2005 1:17 pm
by Danyasaur
wow. . . it's like you know what I've been trying to express but have failed at misserably a thousand time and you wrote it down on paper, thank you, I needed that ^_^ you did a wonderfull job
PostPosted: Mon Apr 04, 2005 4:54 pm
by Rachel
Thanks, y'all. I should have a new one up in a few days. I have a few lines running around in my head right now and I just need a few more and then I can write it down. Until then, I guess y'all can just read this one again. Haha. Bye for now.
PostPosted: Mon Apr 04, 2005 9:33 pm
by Icarus
Good one, Rachel.
the stars
PostPosted: Sun Apr 10, 2005 5:13 pm
by Rachel
Okay, here is the poem that I just finished today. I don't know if it makes much sense so I may rewrite it sometime. Or I might not. I don't know, I'm always second guessing everything I write. Anyways...here it is.
Your eyes draw me in
and I am hypnotized
by the music of your osng
and your shining light
and I am melting
not even the stars
could shine so brilliant
and make me lose myself
to all that I have known
and all I have longed for
was found in their beauty
that no one has believed
the stars and how they shine for me
in the night sky
and sing their beautiful song
that makes me forget where I am
that makes me want to forget
and never remember again
PostPosted: Sun Apr 10, 2005 9:17 pm
by true_noir_chloe
Wow, another great poem, Rachel! ^_______^ Keep 'em coming, like fries at a McDonalds. ~_^
PostPosted: Fri Apr 22, 2005 4:42 pm
by Rachel
I'm not a very big fan of the fries at Mickey D's. hehe. Thanks, Chloe. I'm sort of working on a new one now so maybe it should be up in a few days.