Postby Kaori » Sun Feb 06, 2005 5:31 pm
More than anything else, I encourage you to continue writing. You have some interesting ideas, and I would like to see the story developed further. There are several unanswered questions I have about the world you have created, but that in and of itself is not necessarily a problem, especially if some of these details will be explained later in the story.
If it helps to know this, although there was no explicitly Christian material in the story thus far, neither did I see anything that particularly conflicts with Christianity.
At this point in time, the only suggestion I wish to offer is to consider using a different text. While the current formatting is readable, it would be somewhat more friendly to your readers to use a more standard font.
Let others believe in the God who brings men to trial and judges them. I shall cling to the God who resurrects the dead.
-St. Nikolai Velimirovich
MAL