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PostPosted: Sat Jan 29, 2005 4:20 pm
by antefurem
Can anyone suggest one?

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You found me there
A loner standing, comprehending still
Those golden gates
(Now, try as I may - I'll never know
How dazed I'll be)
"Believe", you said - I did
And many roads brought me to here
Your crimson paths

Was I fully you? - I strove to be
(Impossible. We try but fail.)
... Those gleaming golden gates
My filthy, ragged clothes
Those worn too long
I breathe - I can't
You're here to take me home
(That heaven I heard of for many years
Perfection, praise - summed up - divine!)
And here
My lack
Of words.

Blood I followed - blood divine - frees me here.
You opened the gates
And smiled
You shone with light - those gates
Reflected radiant glory
(Forget these clothes
Forget my faults
Forget my aching human heart)
I believed, I receive
No debt, no pain

Just you.

PostPosted: Sat Jan 29, 2005 4:31 pm
by Rue Shibusky
I dunno... Belief? Faith? neither of those really screams the best title to that poem (that was what you were asking for, right?)

PostPosted: Sat Jan 29, 2005 4:48 pm
by antefurem
Mmm. Yes... but no.

To me, it doesn't fit. ^^;

Thanks anyway, Rue.

Feel free to comment, too!

PostPosted: Sat Jan 29, 2005 4:54 pm
by Rue Shibusky
Ah, so it is for the poem. At first I wasn't sure if it was just part of your signiture or something ^_^. Yeah, I didn't think they would, but those were some words it made me think of at some points. I hope you get a good title for it though, its good.