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Okay so I know I have one thread up already.... but the titles all wrong for all the others... so here they are... comments are welcomed.


This is a poem I wrote right after I found out I was sick. My life before had been marred with agony and I wondered why I was going through even more torture.

There is Darkness
Darkness engulfs me with each step I take.
It has no boundaries, no rules, it does what it pleases.
Bitterness rakes at my heart causing me to stumble.
One question continues to remain.
Why?

I’ve cried out to you, yet no answer came.
I searched and searched, but found myself empty.
I've already been through so much; so why more?
Why must I endure this pain?

Fear shakes my foundation,
I think I may fall.
Why should I hope when all seems lost?

Everything is against me,
Nothing good seems to stay, evil prevails forever.
Where's the purpose in all this madness?

Hidden far from the human eye a small flame flickers in the hole I'm in.
At times, it looks to be gone, and others it's just big enough for me to make a wish for a brighter tomorrow.
But what happened to today?
If there's a way out show me where, because this pit I'm in is frozen.
Pick me up, out of the darkness.
Kindle the flame of hope.
Bring comfort to a once happy heart.

Aside from a few typographical errors, it's a fairly well executed peace of poetry. A bit dark for my tastes, but it has a powerful emotional, and the visual and philosophical are nicely intertwined.

Yeah... alot of my stuff is dark. I just can't capture the happy joyful emotions like others do....


Oh, I fixed the typographical errors. Thanks for bringing them to my attention... that's what I get for typing fast!

I like it It's a quality poem. I hope you write lots more poetry.

Write what you're best at and try to experiment a little too. I've tried to write a rhyming poem but it didnt work out. it seemed forced.

I also make lots of typographical errors because i type fast too

As Kura Ookami said, don't feel like you have to write happy poems (I have some pretty depressing ones myself). Often if you force yourself to, they'll just seem corny and fake.

This is a great poem! I hope to see more of your writing.

Thanks guys. I do try to write happy go giddy ones, (sorry for the expression, I'm not really in a chipper mood) but when a good one comes I'll be sure to share it with you.

This is a work in progress....

What is the Moon
Look above, into the night sky. What do you see?
The moon, shining brightly, filling the earth with her radiant light.
Standing erect, in her beauty, a magnificent wonder.
But can you see it, the tear falling?
Why does the moon cry, for what reason does this tear stain her beautiful cheek?
Look again, into the night sky. What else can you see?
Nothing.

What has become of her stars, the ones she cared for greatly.
The Son has sent it away from her, leaving her all alone.
What is the moon without the her stars?
How can she still shine so bright in the sky,
When all she wants to do is fade away.
One star remains, her Lord, holding her tight, helping her to shine.

The night must go on.
The moon must continue to shine without the stars she cares for,
The one star is enough to sustain her.

Very good!
I like both of your poems.
I must say, this last poem is uplifting to me. thank you for writing it down!

Ssjjvash wrote:Very good!
I like both of your poems.
I must say, this last poem is uplifting to me. thank you for writing it down!

Really? Wow... that's cool. Maybe I can write some not so dark stuff after all. ^_^

I really like this poem as well.

This is something I found recently that I wrote when I was 15. I feel like it still applies to my life today. So I'm going to share it with all of you.

When, Why, What, Who
When my heart was broken and pain entered in, I knew not what to do.
Why did you lend me your shoulder to cry on?
What did I do to deserve your kindness?
Who am I to have a friend such as you?

When my heart was broken and pain entered in, You stood there holding my hand, keeping me strong.
Why did you take the time for someone such as me?
What made you have a sweet love for me when NO one else did?
Who put it into your heart that I was someone special?

When we talked about things, you didn't run away...
Why did you stay?
What was it that made you care that I hurt?
Who do you see when you look at me?

When I opened my heart and let you take care of everything,
Why did you take time to look in?
What did you see?
Who am I?

Even now the pain still lingers in my heart, but at least I know
I have someone to share it with.
You will never leave me. You promised.

When my heart was broken and pain entered in, You took care of it.
Why, I don't know, but you did.
What You changed in me turned out to be good.
Who am I? Your child!

Who are You? My God!

Cool! Most excellent poem!

Thanks!

This is a very good poem! I like it a lot!

My heart is wreched

My soul is weary

The wait is long

And the day lingering

To what purpose is this pain

For what reason this agony

Free the wish of my heart will be

To hold it high in it's purity

Low the hour passes

Slowly the day is done

Just as another has begun

I like your poetry!

Well, this poem seems certainly open for interpretation. As I interpret it, I can identify. Great stuff!

That was the purpose of it... to be open to interpretation the way the reader most relates. I'm glad you like it... I'll continue to post them up!

Great!

Here's another one I just found on my computer I did at the beginning of the summer...

My Heart Cries


My heart cries out in anguish.
Yet there is nothing that I can do.
If only this weren’t true.
The task in which I must preform,
Will destroy all my hope and joy.


When I close my eyes at night all I see is you.
And as the sun breaks the dawn, there my heart will always be,
For that’s where you always leave me.
The birds begin to fly, higher than before,
Taking with them love’s whispers.


My heart is burning, but not with joy.
Flames of pain consume loves delight.
Tear of sorrow fill the night.
Yet no relief comes my way,
Not even with the break of day.


All this and nothing more will be the end of something true,
Something that has given me a second chance,
One thing that made my heart dance.
In the end all will perish,
For the Father above has a different plan,
For both you and I.

Wow. This sounds very sad. It reminds me of some of the poetry I have written...

This one I'm still working on... not yet totally happy with it... I was trying something more on the lines of "joy" not the easiest thing to write about for me....

Two Lovers


Walking steadily across the desert sand
Sweat beading off his brow
Heading towards his home land
Wanting to say what’s on his heart, but not knowing how

Cries the heart within the maid
Tears steam down her lovely face
Locked in the tower, wishing to be saved
Waiting in her white gown trimmed with lace

Trudging forward, toward the goal
Knowing that soon he would be there
Joy filling the very depths of his soul
In the arms of the one who cares

Long has she waited
With each day that passes by
Her heart grows fonder, her love not faded
Looking sadly out into the night sky

On the horizon lay his resting place
His heart beat quickened
Knowing that he would see the beauty of her face
His love for her deepened

Morning broke through
Slowly she began to wake
Instantly she knew
A short breath did she take

He wrapped his arms around the one
The one who’s love had not died
But brightened with the morning sun
The tears he no longer could hide

Holding him tight
Refusing to let go
Tears blinding her sight
Unashamed, she let them flow

Together at last
His lips touched hers
Sorrows away they cast
And a lovers beginning this confers

Anna Mae wrote:Wow. This sounds very sad. It reminds me of some of the poetry I have written...

I'm to lazy to look... do you have a thread here on CAA?

*reads poem* Well, my first reaction is "Aw, that's so sweet!"
It is a well written poem.

Nikki wrote:...And a lovers beginning this confers

For some reason I like this line. I'm not really sure why.

Nikki wrote:

Anna Mae wrote:Wow. This sounds very sad. It reminds me of some of the poetry I have written...

I'm to lazy to look... do you have a thread here on CAA?

Yup.

Anna Mae wrote: For some reason I like this line. I'm not really sure why.

I do too! It just came to me although I don't know why. It just seemed to fit just the way I needed it to.

Isn't it great the way God works things out so eloquently?

good poem, Nikki! very creative and, well, good.

Lord, hear me now
I have come to you with a heavy heart,
and I don't know what to do

My life isn't what it use to be.
There's so many things, that keep me from you.
Many things that keep me from holding on to you


I can't find my way.
All alone in this darkness
I'm so cold, tired, scared.
I don't know what to do,
but to look to you

Falling
Deeper, deeper into the pit
There's no end
Falling head first

No emotion, no pain
Everything motionless
Yet I continue to fall

Deeper, deeper into the depths
When did it begin
I don't remember

Darkness surrounds me
Fear sinks in
I've been falling for so long

When will it end

All have fallen

Dreams shattered

Separation

Anxiety

What life is worth living

In these circumstances I cry aloud
Not knowing if He'll answer
Days, months years go by
Nothing

In the chosen hour
Of His chosen day
A ray of light
A sign of hope
To Him alone I pray