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Okay, so yeah, if you read the title of this thread then you can probably guess what it contains. That's right, my friends, a brand spankin' new poem! I finished it today. Enjoy.

The Fourth of July

Fireflies dance in the moonlight
while the silence screams
for her to admit
the way she truly feels
has been unvoiced all these years
covered by her greatest fear
paralyzing thoughts of what could be
racing behind pain filled eyes
that watch the night sky
ablaze with brilliant lights
each brighter than the one before
heart laid bare on sheets of paper
poems and letters end
"I miss you"

I have no idea if it was written properly or anything, since you know I know nothing about poetry - I just like it. XDXD

Rachel, A little something for you. ~_^

Yo, homefry
It's no lie
I love this poem
'bout the Fourth of July

I love that.

(Yay! Rachel posted another poem!)

true_noir_chloe, if you liked it, it was a good poem. Generally, the point is to express up to three things: philosophy, visual, and emotional expressions. It becomes a poem, now I'm moving into opinions, when it does this with a meter and/or rhyme. This is a truly legitimate poem, even though it does not have rhyme, because, first, of its meter, although I must confess it is a bit hard to catch. Secondly, because of the slightly dismembered way it approaches the subject matter, more as does the human mind than a straightforward representation...


Did I just type all that out? Goodness, I am seriously starting to sound like some boring teacher.

^_^ Good poem, Rachel! neat-o-la! :-B

Great poem rachel,! I'll have to read more of your poetry.

Great!

Magekind wrote:Generally, the point is to express up to three things: philosophy, visual, and emotional expressions. It becomes a poem, now I'm moving into opinions, when it does this with a meter and/or rhyme. This is a truly legitimate poem, even though it does not have rhyme, because, first, of its meter, although I must confess it is a bit hard to catch. Secondly, because of the slightly dismembered way it approaches the subject matter, more as does the human mind than a straightforward representation...

Whoa. I write lots of poetry, but I didn't know any of that until now. Oops.

true_noir_chloe wrote:Yo, homefry
It's no lie
I love this poem
'bout the Fourth of July

This made me so happy. Although it's really not about the Fourth of July. Homefry, hehe. Thanks everyone for reading my poem. I'll try to write another one today. Later peeps!

Rachel wrote:I'll try to write another one today.

Edit- stupid computer! I spit upon thee!

>> "I spit upon thee!" <<

too funny!

I shall wait till the homeflies come home, until you bless us with another poem, dear Rachel. ~_^ I'm so corny.

stupid computer! I spit upon thee!

LOL ^____^