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PostPosted: **Fri Sep 24, 2004 6:14 pm**

Just wanted to know what you guys think of this. Do you think the repetition works, or is it too much? Once again, please be honest with me. Thanks!

Prayer
Lend me Your strength, Lord
So I will not falter
Send me Your peace, Lord
Calm my restless spirit
Give me Your Love, Lord
To help push me onward
Fill me with joy, Lord
Please raise my spirit

I will not fall, Lord
Will not be broken
He will not win, Lord
This is Your battle
You're always here, Lord
Don't leave me now
Stay by my side, Lord
Hold me together

Reveal Your Mercy, Lord
Though I'm not worthy
Pardon my sins, Lord
Help me forgive others
Smile upon me, Lord
I need Your goodness
Grant me the priviledge, Lord
Of being with You

I will not fall, Lord
Will not be broken
He will not win, Lord
This is Your battle
You're always here, Lord
Don't leave me now
Stay by my side, Lord
Hold me together

Shine down upon me, Lord
Your light gives me courage
Guide my steps, Lord
Alone I will stumble
Keep me forever, Lord
On the right path
Show me Your Will, Lord
And make me willing

I will not fall, Lord
Will not be broken
He will not win, Lord
This is Your battle
You're always here, Lord
Don't leave me now
Stay by my side, Lord
Hold me together

PostPosted: **Sat Sep 25, 2004 4:05 pm**

I think it is excellent, Shadowblade! Repetition is often used in poetry, so that's not a problem or anything. Nothing wrong with it. Good job!

PostPosted: **Sat Sep 25, 2004 4:19 pm**

I think the repetition works. It's not too... repetitious- it's good.

PostPosted: **Sun Sep 26, 2004 12:58 pm**

I think it's really good. I could easily be a song. Great job!

PostPosted: **Sun Oct 03, 2004 7:26 pm**

*hugs* Awesome job.

I like it, and it's encouraging...not wordy or big on rhyme/rhythm, but a heartfelt offering. That's what makes a great poem.

PostPosted: **Mon Nov 15, 2004 8:38 am**

not bad i would give it a 8 on a 10 scale

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