"A Warning To The Unrequited"

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"A Warning To The Unrequited"

Postby Zarn Ishtare » Fri Sep 22, 2006 9:14 pm

“A Warning To The Unrequitedâ€
With your doubt, all is comfort
We are all as we appear
No more questions left unanswered
No more wonder, no more fear
Nothing is beauty, nothing's feeling
Blood where there once was a soul
So I ask you, prove yourself
Make me believe that you are whole
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Postby Anna Mae » Mon Oct 09, 2006 11:01 am

This strikes me as somewhat different than some of your other poems, yet it is still very much you. You use some good imagery here, but my favorite line was this:

These words do struggle in the dust with one another,
[SIZE="4"][color="DarkSlateBlue"]God has called me to mission work in Paraguay and Brazil. I may return to CAA someday. God bless all of you![/color][/SIZE]

[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:

“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Postby Zarn Ishtare » Mon Oct 09, 2006 11:49 am

I'm glad you think so, becuase I loathe this thing. It's not really a poem, more of a rant...and it came out so AWKWARD when I spoke it...
With your doubt, all is comfort
We are all as we appear
No more questions left unanswered
No more wonder, no more fear
Nothing is beauty, nothing's feeling
Blood where there once was a soul
So I ask you, prove yourself
Make me believe that you are whole
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Postby Animus Seed » Mon Oct 09, 2006 6:33 pm

My favorite bit is "Look! I speak from uninspiration!"
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Kyrie eléison.
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